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Please
do not hate me
for my weakness
(the way that I do)

Do not despise me
because I bruise easily

Please
think no less of me
(the way that I do)

And when my beauty
which once lured you
is marred by
the pain of dark blue

Please
think no less of me
(the way that I do)

Do not turn your back
if this mess
tests your patience
in the heat of the moment
for that is the moment
I will need you the most

Please think no less of me
(the way that I do)

For needing you
For wanting you
to love me
please
think no less of me

(for that is one thing I can't ever do)
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Kiuesque Featured By Owner Oct 30, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
:nod: I have two specific historical people in my head while reading this xD Wonderful job!
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TheLunaLily Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Who are they?
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TheLunaLily Featured By Owner Oct 30, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
First of all, thank you! And second, I am dying to know which two historical people you had in your head while reading this! And third, were you ever going to tell me, or just tease me with that that comment and leave me curious and wondering about it forever?
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AlisaTamna Featured By Owner Sep 9, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
I love this one! Makes me feel less alone with those same thoughts...
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TheLunaLily Featured By Owner Sep 11, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
I'm glad you feel less alone. :hug:
That's why feel brave enough to put all of this intensely personal stuff I write out there..
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cjheery Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2011  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Wonderful. I think most of us can relate to it. We love as we are.
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:iconthelunalily:
TheLunaLily Featured By Owner Aug 17, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you.
It's not a good thing to feel, that the one you love will see things in you that you are ashamed of that, things you wish were not there. That they will hate you for things you hate about yourself.
You do want them to love you as you are. And you what them to love you in spite of everything you are and everything you are not.
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angelichope Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2011
I definitely DO NOT think less of you!:iconcuddleplz: I think your writings are amazing!:iconlove1plz::iconlove2plz:
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:iconthelunalily:
TheLunaLily Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
:huggle: I am glad for that! :heart:

Thank you so much. That is so sweet of you to say that. :huggle:
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FuzzyHoser Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
You know this is a song, don't you? One of those great songs...that means as much each time you hear it. Someone ought to sing it. :heart:
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:iconthelunalily:
TheLunaLily Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
You scared the hell out of me! I thought at first that you were informing me that this was an actual song, like I ripped off a song without knowing it!
deep breaths deep breaths
haha!
Thank you! Now that I'm no longer freaking out I really appreciate that. :)
Maybe you should sing it.
:heart:
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FuzzyHoser Featured By Owner Aug 30, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Me? Sing..?? Oh gosh, no.
I'm not evil.
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TheLunaLily Featured By Owner Aug 30, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
You are a little ;)
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FuzzyHoser Featured By Owner Aug 31, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Fair enough. :)
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TheLunaLily Featured By Owner Aug 31, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
:)
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DerelictVampire Featured By Owner Aug 10, 2011
that's so funny :rofl:
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Satsumo Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2011  Professional Traditional Artist
Thats not how people work. If you need them to help, they think less of you, they walk away.
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capricordestin Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2011   Writer
Featured here: [link] Don't forget to fave the article! :aww:
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TheLunaLily Featured By Owner Aug 3, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Article faved! Thank you for the feature! :love:
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capricordestin Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2011   Writer
You're very welcome!
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DerelictVampire Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2011
Ohh, I relate so much to this. This piece pulls at my heart and puts into words what I've felt so poignantly myself. I feel like you're writing about me--the definition of great poetry. Thank you!
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TheLunaLily Featured By Owner Aug 3, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
That is one of the best compliments, for someone to tell you that they are able to relate to what you have written, and I thank you so much.
Yet those are the saddest compliments of all, as people relate to the saddest of my writings, and I never want anyone to feel that way.
:huggle:
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DerelictVampire Featured By Owner Aug 3, 2011
I know exactly what you mean. Someone commented on one of my poems saying that it broke her heart. In my response I said, "I don't know whether to thank you or apologize, lol."

But even our darkest times can inspire others, even if they just know that someone out there understands, especially for people who feel isolated and alone. That in itself can bring hope and make life worth living. And that's the gift of the poet, and I think what we have to offer the world.
I think I'm being too serious lately. Time to lighten up: :dance: :party:
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Meggie272 Featured By Owner Jul 27, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
I love this, like I love most of your poetry - it's a feeling that I'm very familiar with and you capture it perfectly. My favourite stanza was the sixth. :)
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TheLunaLily Featured By Owner Jul 27, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you, Meg. :) I always love hearing from you. :hug:
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Meggie272 Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
And I always love reading your poetry. :cuddle:
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:iconthelunalily:
TheLunaLily Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
:tighthug: Thank you.
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DominaMoon Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2011   General Artist
Beautiful as always :heart:
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:iconthelunalily:
TheLunaLily Featured By Owner Jul 27, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you, Ava. :hug:
How are doing?
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DominaMoon Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2011   General Artist
Most welcome :hug:
Alright, thank god for my friends haha, yourself?
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TheLunaLily Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
That's good! :heart: Me too. Thought the storm that just passed through was gonna kill me, but the pain was much much less than I thought it was going to be. :)
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DominaMoon Featured By Owner Jul 31, 2011   General Artist
Well at least it wasn't as bad as you expected! Still sorry though :(
I'll virtually hug you and make it all better :huggle: (I wish it worked like that haha)
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:iconthelunalily:
TheLunaLily Featured By Owner Jul 31, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Nah I'm cool! A few days of pain beats a fews of it. :nod:
But I'll take that hug anyway. :)

:hug:
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DominaMoon Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2011   General Artist
haha okay ^^
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WinterofFire Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Who would hate you?
I don't know you in real life but you don't seem hate-able to me
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TheLunaLily Featured By Owner Jul 27, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
:heart: Thank you for that. :heart:
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WinterofFire Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Welcome
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dragon-fly-to-me Featured By Owner Jul 24, 2011
How could anyone? Hate you...:no: never...:love:
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:iconthelunalily:
TheLunaLily Featured By Owner Jul 25, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
I'm glad that you don't. :hug:
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dragon-fly-to-me Featured By Owner Jul 25, 2011
Never.
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TheLunaLily Featured By Owner Jul 25, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
:iconbeautifulheartplz:
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xlntwtch Featured By Owner Jul 24, 2011   Writer
:+fav:
This is a very good poem.
I doubt I could ever match it in intensity and fluidity. It's as lyrical as song and as revealing as a diary. Thank you.


PS. Did you mean to put an 's' on "test[s]" in that one stanza?
Please don't take offense that I ask. I usually have multiple typos in everything I write. [!]
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TheLunaLily Featured By Owner Jul 25, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you:hug: And you never know what might come out of your mind from certain experiences. This was something written almost in one go, probably because it was always there.
:heart:

And yes I did, thank you! I appreciate your telling me because I'm not sure how long that would have taken for me to notice it, as this is not one I'm sure I would have come back to very much. Typo corrected!
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xlntwtch Featured By Owner Jul 25, 2011   Writer
You're always welcome. :hug: ... :heart:
I know about "certain experiences"...mine are factored into nearly everything I write.

I'm also glad you didn't mind me telling you about a typo.
Some people actually do mind. :shrug: I sure don't.
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TheLunaLily Featured By Owner Jul 27, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Don't worry about it. I always do worry about telling people about typos, unless it's a friend. :)

:hug: Anyone who writes well has to put a piece of themselves into their words. :nod: So I know that you do. :)
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xlntwtch Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2011   Writer
Re: 'Self in ones work'...that's... :icontrueplz: ... :nod:

:hug:
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TheLunaLily Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
LOL!

Tight freaking hug! :tighthug: and much much love! :heart: :iconbigheartplz: :heart:
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xlntwtch Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2011   Writer
:iconblushplz:
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TheLunaLily Featured By Owner Aug 3, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
:iconkissingplz:
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beeinthebottle Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2011   Writer
I really like how you've written this -- and the revisions you've made truly add to the piece. Great work!
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