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Poems and love songs breed dead dreams,
strangled by weeds, face down in the ground
with no roses to mourn them.  

Singers are poets that croon
(if you happen to lose your little heart to their tune)
and poets are false prophets -
true love will last forever
if they care to write it,
but not if you swallow the lines...


yet, they always do.


We all have a place
set for us in the shade
in our own private garden of weeds.
Your heart deservers more than the promises of poems.
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GothicLoverUltimate Featured By Owner May 26, 2013  Student General Artist
Awesome! I like that it's not chopped up to every small line. For Ex)

Poems and love songs bring dead dreams.
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Poems,
And love songs,
Bring, dead, dreams.
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TheLunaLily Featured By Owner May 27, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much!!
Chopping it up like that never would have felt right.
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GothicLoverUltimate Featured By Owner May 27, 2013  Student General Artist
Haha! I know, right? For this poem (and others like it) lines chopped up like that whould have a slightly awkward feel to it.
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TheLunaLily Featured By Owner May 28, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Yet time and time again you see it. :no: So sad.

Why do bad line breaks happen to good poems?

Haha, I shouldn't judge to harshly as I'm sure I've done it, especially in older poems.
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FuzzyHoser Featured By Owner May 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This is a sooooong, Shanna. Such a lyrical quality to it. (:
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TheLunaLily Featured By Owner May 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! (You always know my songs!):iconsingplz: :D
:sing: :heart:
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FuzzyHoser Featured By Owner May 29, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
(You make it pretty easy.) :heart:
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TheLunaLily Featured By Owner May 29, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:)
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Anselm-King Featured By Owner May 19, 2013
I feel like I could read this 10 times over and be more impressed every time.
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TheLunaLily Featured By Owner May 19, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:love: Thank you very much!
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