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You have been claimed.
I have seen my competition holding perfumed picks
and daggers in their eyes.
They know the value of the treasure I have found,
but I'm already in your skin.
While I'm here, in my space beside your heart,
would you mind if I gently took a rib?

This is archaeology, my love.

Don't worry,
I will sew you up with kisses;
stitch you up with x's and oh's
x's and oh's

Hold me steady,
while I chisel our names into the bone that crossed your heart,
like kids in campus trees:
You
+
Me
4ever
.

I will sacrifice a rib if you will do the same.
We will tie a bow around them, and send them into space,
and Orion and Andromeda will be as jealous as the rest
when they read our names upon our bones
and see our love alive inside the marrow.

This is archaeology.
Long after we are dead, our story will live on.
This is archaeology, my love. The story of us.
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athena4wisdom Featured By Owner Feb 22, 2014
This is so beautiful :*)
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:iconthelunalily:
TheLunaLily Featured By Owner Jul 17, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you. :)
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athena4wisdom Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2014
No problem ^.^
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wordeea Featured By Owner Feb 27, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
that is absolutely gorgeous. i wish i would have thought of it. what a great ode to love
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:iconthelunalily:
TheLunaLily Featured By Owner Feb 27, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much. :heart:
I feel that way so often when reading other people's work. :) I can't tell you how many poems I've come across on DA that I wish I would have written.
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wordeea Featured By Owner Feb 27, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
yes, very often here too :)
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DottieOnTheMoon Featured By Owner Dec 1, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Gripped me from the first line!

Would you mind if I gently took a rib? - seriously, that is just stunning imagery.
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:iconthelunalily:
TheLunaLily Featured By Owner Dec 3, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
:love: Thank you so much! :love:
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Frencifry Featured By Owner Nov 15, 2011  Student Writer
i like this metaphor, very originally crafted(: very well written, m'dear(:
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:iconthelunalily:
TheLunaLily Featured By Owner Nov 15, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!! :)
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Frencifry Featured By Owner Nov 16, 2011  Student Writer
you are welcome(:
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thetaoofchaos Featured By Owner Nov 10, 2011   Writer
It's very sweet and clever. I really enjoyed the first part:

" You have been claimed. I have seen my competition holding perfumed picks and daggers in their eyes."

Well done.
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:iconthelunalily:
TheLunaLily Featured By Owner Nov 15, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you. I'm glad you like that part. :)

<3
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Kitri-du-Lac Featured By Owner Nov 10, 2011
This is lovely! The metaphor is very original, and works better than I'd have thought :)
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:iconthelunalily:
TheLunaLily Featured By Owner Nov 15, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
:hug: Thank you very much!
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sammyfraz Featured By Owner Nov 8, 2011
How long must I wait to be discovered, what If I were king tut's tomb? but what If I was clay pots and you could find me any day.



but then again I might be a t-rex skeleton... rawr.
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:iconthelunalily:
TheLunaLily Featured By Owner Nov 15, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
it seems that is not a simple answer. . . since you might be a t-rex skeleton.
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sammyfraz Featured By Owner Nov 15, 2011
I might also being something good though... like that remote you lost two years ago.
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:iconthelunalily:
TheLunaLily Featured By Owner Nov 15, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Hey! If you're that remote, I looked everywhere for you!
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:iconsammyfraz:
sammyfraz Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2011
I was under the couch cushions.
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:iconthelunalily:
TheLunaLily Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
too bad i didn't look there before ordering a new one.
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sammyfraz Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2011
too late now.
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:iconthelunalily:
TheLunaLily Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
yup.
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dragon-fly-to-me Featured By Owner Nov 7, 2011
Humm...startling, a bit.
Archaeology...rediscovering things of the past. Digging through times layers, finding value in what has been forgotten, left behind.
(see...you have got me thinking. :))

While I'm here, in my space beside your heart,
would you mind if I gently took a rib?


maybe that is how love is sometimes.
maybe that is how it is when you find a heart that has been buried underneath much debris...debris that comes from having a broken heart...
(still thinking...:heart:)

Great work, dear.
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TheLunaLily Featured By Owner Nov 15, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Startling?
This one really did get you thinking, didn't it? :)

Thank you, Jess. :heart:
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dragon-fly-to-me Featured By Owner Nov 16, 2011
Yes it did.
And I thank you for it, dearling. :heart:
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:iconthelunalily:
TheLunaLily Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
You're welcome, lovely. :hug:
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dragon-fly-to-me Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2011
:heart:
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DragonsChest Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2011  Professional Writer
Wow, emotion in motion my friend... :wow:
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:iconthelunalily:
TheLunaLily Featured By Owner Nov 15, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
:hug: Thank you, David. :hug:
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DragonsChest Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2011  Professional Writer
:icontiphankeplz::iconwelcome1plz::iconwelcome2plz::iconwelcome3plz::iconwelcome4plz::icontiphankeplz:
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QueenOfQuills Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2011  Student Writer
Intriguing! I think you've captured a really unique perspective of love/devotion in this! I found the reference to ribs strangely biblical - not sure if you intended that! Either way it works well.
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TheLunaLily Featured By Owner Nov 15, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much. I did intend that. :)

<3
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jimfleming Featured By Owner Nov 3, 2011
Wonderful read! The title pulled me in and I am happy it did :) :heart: (Thanks Ron for featuring)
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:iconthelunalily:
TheLunaLily Featured By Owner Nov 15, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! I'm happy it did, too. :)
(I definitely thank Ron for featuring it <3)
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jimfleming Featured By Owner Nov 16, 2011
:)
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JuliusScipio Featured By Owner Nov 3, 2011  Student Writer
Amazing! What an image of romantic love. I'm very impressed! Carmina tuum decorum est!

(I also appreciate the irony of the woman taking the rib this time around. :P )

This is startling, arresting imagery at it's best; the conceit, and I love it. Favorited for sure.
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TheLunaLily Featured By Owner Nov 3, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
:wow: Thank you so much!

(haha. I like putting a different spin on things.)

It makes me very happy indeed to know that you appreciate my poem. Thank you again. :heart:
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Bark Featured By Owner Nov 3, 2011  Professional Writer
Featured here [link]
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:iconthelunalily:
TheLunaLily Featured By Owner Nov 3, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
:heart: Thank you, Ron!!!! :heart:
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FuzzyHoser Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Wow, woman!
Talk about a different take on romantics..
This is pretty much incredible. :wow:
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:iconthelunalily:
TheLunaLily Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
:D Thank you! :heart:

I thought about the phrase " I want to jump your bones" ,and laughed, and then stuff came tumbling out onto the page that was a little bit more romantic and a lot stranger sounding. lol!
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FuzzyHoser Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Bahahahahah!! That right there is magical stuff, Shanna. Lol..
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:iconthelunalily:
TheLunaLily Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
You know me, I'm chock full of pixie dust. ;)
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FuzzyHoser Featured By Owner Nov 6, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Uh yeah..sounds about right-ish.
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GargoylesBlood Featured By Owner Nov 1, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
:shamrock: :iconredheartplz: :shamrock:
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:iconthelunalily:
TheLunaLily Featured By Owner Nov 1, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you for the heart and the favorite of my nonsense. :hug:
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GargoylesBlood Featured By Owner Nov 1, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
:shamrock: "Ye are more than welcome. I enjoy reading what ye write." :shamrock:
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:iconthelunalily:
TheLunaLily Featured By Owner Nov 1, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Thats so sweet of you. <3
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